Hello, my confident queens and eager readers,
As you may know, I’ve been working on something tantalising: a story that explores the intricate dance of power and submission in a way that only we can appreciate. Today, I am thrilled to share a sneak peek into my upcoming book, “The Perfect Servant”.
The Perfect Servant, New FLR Fiction from Cat Boulder
Meet Michael, a meticulous finance professional whose life is turned upside down by Vanessa Sinclair, a commanding new marketing executive. As Vanessa tests Michael’s boundaries with increasingly personal tasks, he struggles with societal expectations and his growing desire to serve her. Guided by a mentor, Michael begins to embrace his submissive nature. Vanessa trains him to be her perfect servant, leading to a life-altering commitment ceremony. Will Michael fully embrace his new identity, or will his journey push him beyond his limits?
I’m inviting you, my cherished readers, to dive into the first three chapters and share your thoughts. Your feedback is invaluable in shaping this story into something truly captivating.
Here’s how you can get involved:
- 1. Read the First Three Chapters (
Chapter 1), (Chapter 2), (Chapter 3). - 2. Share Your Thoughts: Comment directly on the Google Docs, post your thoughts on this blog, email me or slide into my DMs on Tumblr or X/Twitter. Tell me what do you love? What leaves you wanting more? Are there any parts that make your heart race or leave you craving more detail?
- 3. Spread the Word: Share this post with friends who might be intrigued by Michael and Vanessa’s journey. The more, the merrier!
Your insights will help me fine-tune Michael’s path of submission and Vanessa’s commanding presence, ensuring every page resonates with authenticity and excitement. I can’t wait to hear what you think and to share more of this intoxicating story with you.
Reviewers Guide:
When sharing your feedback on the first three chapters of “The Perfect Servant,” please consider a range of aspects to help refine and elevate the story. Point out any typos or grammatical errors that may have slipped through, and let me know if there are sections where the flow feels interrupted or disjointed. Your thoughts on character development, particularly Michael’s evolving submissiveness and Vanessa’s commanding presence, are invaluable. Are their interactions believable and engaging? Do you feel the tension and chemistry between them? Additionally, suggest any directions or scenarios you’d love to see explored as the story progresses. Your insights will help ensure that every detail resonates authentically and keeps you enthralled.
Stay Female-led, and thank you for your support.
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What a wonderful start to this story. As a non native English speaker, i will abstain from remarks on typos and grammatical errors (haven’t seen any).
The way the story is told, from multiple perspective, provides a way into the mind of both m and Ms S. The journey they are on or realize they are about to embark on is written in a nice pace, without getting overly detailed or to fast to the cheese.
i find it interesting that the setting is one in which the development of this dynamic is justified and “normalized”.
Hope to be able to contribute to the creation of this wonderful novel.
I am enjoying reading the chapters and will read them again.
Regarding character development:
For me Michael’s apparent confusion, or misunderstanding of the effects his supervisor has on him, seem a bit unbelievable. Perhaps it is only my own experience, but at Michael’s age I would have known exactly why this woman was having such strong effects on me.
While I had no FLR experience as a young man, I was definitely attracted to and excited by the prospect of meeting a powerful woman in control.
Therefore, I find Michael’s apparent cluelessness a bit overdone.
Perhaps others have a different experience and have discovered their submissive natures later on in life.
And, I will admit, his seemingly gradual progression into servitude does make for interesting reading, the reader wanting to keep going to find out what will happen the next time the meets with his superior.
Thanks for sharing your work.
Hello, Google Docs forces me to reveal my name, so I’ll give you my comments on Chapter One here, as follows:
I enjoyed this very much and consider it the germ of a great book or series that can build on your concept. I enjoyed your writing as well. In the opening few paragraphs use fewer adjectives and adverbs. If you want to show that someone is meticulous, describe a concrete action or two and point the reader to the conclusion.
Don’t repeat dialogue. She only needs to say something once unless you want to point out that she is “hypnotizing” him or repeating for effect.
Male readers are visual and submissive males are often fixated on legs and stockings, so some visual description and occasional reference to Vanessa’s legs, stockings, and feet will stimulate many of them. For instance, when you write “She leaned back in her chair, crossing her legs” you might reference the color of her stockings or something about her shoe falling slightly off her foot.
Rather than introducing the firm’s admirable matching program here, you might allude to it more cryptically and then spend an entire chapter about the firm’s founder, culture, HR policies, how the female-centered HR polices evolved, what they mean for business strategy and shareholder interests, and the like. Introducing it in this off-hand way makes it sound like an afterthought, but it might be the center of the book or a series of books.
I love office femdom themes (my wife is my boss). One source of ideas is the series by the late Mistress Benay, “Femdom Law Firm” published on Alibris. I think your concept is even better and can go far.
https://www.alibris.com/Femdom-Law-Firm-A-Tale-of-Female-Domination-Mistress-Benay/book/41281748?utm_medium=affiliate&utm_source=%2FjZHTpnCvx8&utm_campaign=10&siteID=_jZHTpnCvx8-94VFgn34XOsxVYXgNQJqcA
For example, at the beginning of Chapter Two, rather than
“her commanding presence washed over him” just “her presence washed over him.”
Ah, my darlings, your words have been nothing short of delicious. The flood of your insights and musings has me absolutely captivated. I’m savoring each delectable piece of feedback, and rest assured, I’ll be diving deep into every bit of it before I let my pen dance again. This writing journey has been an intoxicating pleasure, and I can’t wait to share more of my tantalizing tales with you. Stay tuned, lovelies!